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I feel the distance when I look
right into your face
My stomach drops, my heart don't leap
I hope this goes away.

I remember when you saved me, like
a prince atop his steed
How foolish it feels for me to think
that this ends happily.

You are no prince, or I a princess
Baby, its reality.
Times are tough, the poison's taken
and I have gone to sleep.

Wake me, wake me, kiss me tight
prove true a happy ending
I'm trapped to think of fairy tales
I'm foolish
   -but it don't stop me

Reality's no children's story
my dreams I know are fiction.
I'm not a helpless sleeping beauty
these tales
are
my
addiction.

It's half past twelve and where's my prince?
Have I any chance?
I'm no frail and hopeless beauty
And  you  are  not  my  prince.
<\3

A tale of a girl who holds reality in high expectations. Who thinks in terms of fairy tales and trusts blindly those who she thinks can give her that reality.

An oldie now, but I still love it. :)

Stock creds: ~MarjoleinART-Stock & ~Babybird-Stock for header.
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DevilsMatrix Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Writer
These would make good lyrics.. seams abit like a paramore song. This is just my oppinion though. :) I like it, a good read, love the flow and the subtle rhyming. beautiful.
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013   Digital Artist
thank you so much! :glomp: Paramore references don't bug me in the least. :)
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DevilsMatrix Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2013  Student Writer
:) no worries !
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yami-joey Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student General Artist
I can imagine it being a song, it's really nice :)
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013   Digital Artist
thanks :D
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Zoe-che Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Very powerful o.o;
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I love it :heart:
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012   Digital Artist
thank you! :glomp:
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xebra7 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2010
I would critique this if I could, do you mind if I add my thoughts in the comments?
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2010   Digital Artist
not at all :)
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xebra7 Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2010
Great! Thanks, here's my thoughts...

The first thing I look at before a poem is how it presents itself on the page, and the first thing I look at after a poem is how true it seemed to the author. I was glad to realize that not only was the poem nicely set up and showed emotion, but it also contained some of my favorite attributes in writing, ambiguity and disregard for rules. The poem set up a nice tone, rhythm, and rhyme scheme at the beginning and was slowly infused with slant rhymes and more line breaks through out, especially in the fourth and fifth stanza. And some lines showed potential for multiple interpretations.

However, poem tends to lack subtlety. When lines like, "Reality's no children's story" are placed it doesn't really give the reader any room to breathe or much room for interpretation. The poem much of the time tends to reveal facts and closes down to prove something to the reader, where many poets would believe that poems need to start closed and open up letting the reader think and figure things out for themselves. Be that what you had intended for the poem or not.

This poem has great potential, and shows to be a provocative idea that I very much enjoy thinking on. It shows great form and good writing but it hasn't had the change to open up all the way and bloom into its greatest form. If you work on it, whether or not you follow my advice, I'm sure it has more places to go.
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2010   Digital Artist
thank you very much :hug: ! I appreciate the comments!
I never really deciphered poetry in class or out, it was more of something that I did as a small small hobby. So I am very interested in this critique. I've always had issues ending poems, which is why I don't have much in my gallery. So, basically you say I am doing this reverse to the norm, that I need to end a poem with subtlety instead of beginning with it? Make the reader wonder as to the true results/interpretation of the poem's intentions?
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xebra7 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2010
Yeah, basically. Play around with it a little more maybe, and try to make the reader really think about what you are saying. However that doesn't need to mean it has to be purposefully vague it could just mean that the message or statements you are saying as a whole are something to think on. It's easier to understand if I had specific examples, but I think you already basically get the idea.
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2010   Digital Artist
thanks :)
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xebra7 Featured By Owner Sep 28, 2010
:D
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Just-Mike Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2010  Student Writer
Intresting. I like it
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2010   Digital Artist
danke :)
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martine8719 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010
I really like this. I really love the 5th stanza (I hope that is the right word). She knows it isn't real, but yet she still longs for her fairy tales. Very moving
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2010   Digital Artist
thanks a bunch! :hug:
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angelsarefascists Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, double negatives!

Nice idea, but not really my style.
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rikulovesnamine Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010
I like this <33
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010   Digital Artist
thanks :D
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rikulovesnamine Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010
no problem =)
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akiris87 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010  Student
I don't really know why this speaks to me right now, guess everyone is open to there own interpretation. I really didn't know that you did creative writing like this and i like it. I feel that this is either a random thought but with some feeling behind it. I especially like the title of this piece. I hope you continue your good work.
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AprilMcGuire Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2010   Digital Artist
thanks :) Its a bit old now, but I revised it before submitting it. I used to do a lot of writing when I dated a poet a few years back XD haha.. but I wrote before that, too... just not as much. So, its few and far between today but I'll never stop :)
This poem is actually about my ex ;D
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